[First Paragraph] The Hidden Staircase (Nancy Drew Mystery Stories, #2) by Carolyn Keene

Nancy Drew began peeling off her garden gloves as she ran up the porch steps and into the hall to answer the ringing telephone. She picked it up and said, "Hello!"

"Hi, Nancy! This is Helen." Although Helen Corning was nearly three years older than Nancy, the two girls were close friends.

First Chapter First Paragraph Tuesday Intros is a weekly book blog meme hosted by Bibliophile by the Sea in which participants share the first paragraph or two of a book they're planning to read soon!

So, I really don't like this one. It's boring, first of all, and adding the second paragraph doesn't do a thing to make it more interesting. What makes it worse, though, is that what little imagery is in the first paragraph is something that really makes my skin crawl. It's just a me thing, of course, rather than a real criticism, but dear god is the phrase "peeling off [something]" fucking gross. Like, could you not?

What about you? Does this opening make you want to read the rest of the book? If not, how would you improve it? Let me know in the comments below, and tune in next Tuesday for another book's first paragraph!

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